> TO: Miramax Studios
> FROM: Storyline Editor
> RE: 'Lord of Rings' story
> Ok, Jack -- I read this grossly oversized book, and I think we can
> handle it, but we have got to slim-n-trim this one big time to get it into
> our 2:07 frame. Luckily, 2/3 of this book is just dead weight. Proposed
> Merry and Pippin, or at least one of them. Too easy to confuse. Too
> many Hobbits.
> Sam. Sure, he's got the supporting role, but isn't Frodo's lone
> struggle against impossible odds twice as heroic without him?
> Faramir. Wussy, non-heroic character- all he does is to get shot and
> lie around in agony. A waste of scenes. Better to keep Boromir alive, use
> him in later scenes.
> Imrahil. Who cares?
> Saruman. Needless duplication of a villain.
> Kingdom of Rohan & its inhabitants. Needless duplication of a kingdom.
> Ents. Talking trees? Makes me think of 'The Wizard of Oz'.
> Nine Black Riders. Reduce to three.
> Some general critiques:
> Dividing up the plot into two lines after they come down the Big River.
> No good. Keep the plot straight, have them all go to Minas Tirith, then
> all go to Mordor.
> This reverse-psychology business with the Ring -- no good. Confuses the
> audience. Suggest new ending: Frodo _takes_ the ring, then fights duel
> with Sauron. Big fight on Mount Doom. Sauron blasts him with electric
> bolts from his fingertips. Frodo lies dying on the mountain. Suddenly the
> Chief Nazgul says 'I am your father, Frodo,' picks up Sauron and throws him
> down the volcano. Big eruption. Segue to final ceremony scene. Whaddaya
> P.S. Can we get some submachine guns in this story? Maybe studded with
> spikes all over to give them a medieval look?
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